Hey all, im so sorry for making this blog skin looks too girly la! sorry to the guys. IT WILL BE CHANGED soon i hope. need to finish assignments first.
ANYHOOS.

FEEDBACK FOR OC OUTLINES

Amelia: Content looks fine though I am not sure if you can finish your presentation within 7 minutes?

Cerlyn: Good. Foundation of an Empire --> are you going to do indepth, or just a brief intro?

Charmaine: Main point 2: "A mini biography on a Japanese Animator,; Hayao Miyazaki" not related to specific purpose of presentation. Better to focus on pain point 1 and maybe provide examples mentioned in 'main point 3' ( which, in my opinion, is not a main point at all)

Shina: Approved.

Lengfei: "To want the audience have a better understanding for Sweeney Todd" is not very clear. What do you mean by 'To want..."? One concern, can you finish in 7 minutes?

Ashlyn: Instead of focusing on 3 artists, focus on 2, or better still, just one. Rather you go more in depth then to touch and go. Also, it will be easier for you to manage your Q&A since the audience's questions will be more focused?

Chessa: What does the 'it' refers to --> "To educate the audience on its existence"? Just remember that the video should not substitute for content.

Siuyun: What do you mean by "the applications of makeup" ? What goes into this main point? Can do without main point

3. Vencia: You've got to relate your presentation to 'inner beauty'. Are you able to finish your presentation in 7 minutes?

Makiyo: Approved. Just be aware of the time limit.

Ariel: Too ambitious. Just talk about dance - "To give people information on modern dances and what is good about dance" - remove the second half, i.e. main point 3.

Mel: Does main point 3 tie in with your specific purpose for the presentation? If it doesn't, then remove it. Be more focused. Also, it helps with time management.

Fara: Approved. Just make sure you finish your presentation within 7 minutes.

Lijuan: Approved.

Justin: Would prefer you to be more focused. Narrow in on one area instead of trying to do a general overview of graffiti. Easier for you to manage Q&A as well. REDO.

Ee Hwan: For main point 2, I can't see the link between the 2 sub-points - "1- How the general public view against plastic surgery. 2- Different types of plastic surgery." Better to focus on one area then to give a broad overview of it.

Lim Kar: What exactly goes into content for photography types and styles? Needs elaboration.

Alex: Please indicate main points for main points 1,2 and 3. Right now, he merely provided what seems like the first paragraph to each of the main points rather than the MAIN points. REDO.

AS FOR PEI ZHI AND CHUN YONG, PLEASE DO IT IN WORD FORMAT AND RESEND HER.




TAKE NOTE:

IDS LESSONS ON THIS WED AND NEXT MONDAY WILL BE CANCELLED SO PLS DO UR VIRTUAL IDS HW FOR THE 2 LESSONS.

IDS ALSO HAS AN EXTRA HW! THAT SWATCH THING. PLS TAKE NOTE.


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